Alan Beard's site

Story: No Beatles' Song

Mag: First Stop Fiction

Editorial Comment:

Dear Alan,

Thank you for the opportunity to read your work. There's a lot to like here, but we are going to pass on this piece.

I appreciate the concise language and I like the "box no bigger than an eye." But I had a hard time making sense of what was actually happening, and some of the details (like each word being carefully pronounced) didn't add much for me. Just my take, of course, and other readers could easily feel quite differently.

Thank you for thinking of First Stop, and feel free to try us again in the future.

Sincerely,

Justis Mills

Editor

My comment: Thanks for the crit, Justis. I will try again. PS it's not 'no bigger than an eye' but 'no bigger than a die' (singular of dice)...